No worries! This is a collaborative effort here. Some of my feedback, other than that Complaint looks good.
17 - Consider breaking the sentence into smaller fragments.
19 - "..kept contacting... "
22 - do you have the proof of delivery or certificate of mailing the response to RFE? You can add that here if you like.
32 - First Lady's office or Office of the First Lady
36 - apologized? or was it apologize. You can even leave out the CIS niceties as it's not pertinent to the point you are making.
37- you want to refer to February 4, 2008 USCIS Memorandum not Feb memo.
43 - you may want to add generally , "...generally valid for one year" because now EAD can be issued for two years under certain circumstances( if Pd is not current at the time of EAD application). You may want to add "This further compounds Plaintiff’s irreparable injuries by disenfranchising him from participation in the U.S. political process for an unknown period of time." to 43(f)
You probably don't want to give following cases out in the Complaint but so that you know:
Precedents from N.D.Cal. - Close to 2 years or little more is unreasonable delay
Quan v. Chertoff, 2007 U.S. Dist. LEXIS 44081 (N.D. Cal. June 7, 2007)(23 month delay unreasonable);
Juanhua Dong v. Chertoff, No. C07-0266 SBA (N.D Cal. May 15 2007) (holding close to two years delay unreasonable;
See e.g., Gelfer v. Chertoff, C06-06724 WHA, 2007 U.S. Dist. LEXIS 26466, 2007 WL 902382, *1 (N.D. Cal. 2007) (more than two years delay unreasonable).
Huang v. Chertoff, No C07-0277 JF, 2007 WL 1831105, * 2 (N.D. Cal. June 25, 2007) (despite national security concerns and increased security checks since 9/11, more than two-year delay is unreasonable as a matter of law if there is no particular explanation as to cause of the delay);
Dear Friends,
I am planning on file WOM on AOS soon. Could the experienced members take a look at my draft complaint and give me some feedback? Anything should be there but not yet? anything should be removed/rephrased? Any citation mistake or legally incorrect terms? Comment on the format etc. etc. Any comment is welcome, the more the better.
I should admit that I shamelessly copied a lot from Jefkorn's draft complaint and from the sample on the first page of this thread. My hats off to Jefkorn and those who put in the hard work.
I am too sleepy to read straight, please help me catch the bugs in the complaint!
Many thanks!