A few suggestions to the document
karma_yoga,
1. "We will like to request for a group meeting as soon as possible to discuss the issues in details."
Should read as:
"We would deeply appreciate it, if you could spare some time for a meeting with us, at your earliest convinience, in order discuss our issues in further detail."
2. "We have submitted, the petition and 3000 plus member’s signatures from several states to Ms. Candice at Fremont Office."
Should read as:
"We have submitted, the petition and 3000 plus member’s signatures from several states to Ms. Candice at your Fremont Office.
2. "Please use there contact info to communicate with us further."
Should read as:
"Please use their contact information to communicate with us further."
IMHO, the following line should be deleted:
"We request your continued support of hi-tech immigrants and for recognizing their contribution to Silicon Valley."
And replaced with
"We request your assistance and support in helping make the life of legal immigrants smoother and more predictable."
We can all sign the petition